Using Comparisons and Descriptions

Introduction

There are a variety of techniques that can be used to describe and compare, but selecting an appropriate one is especially important when communicating science, because very often we need to describe experiments, phenomena and/or situations of which our audiences have no experience.

More generally, using comparisons and descriptions selectively in your writing will also make it easier and more interesting to read. When done effectively, it will provide an extra level of engagement with your readers, which is useful if you have to use a certain amount of jargon or if you simply want to make your article more accessible. For example, if you have to explain how cell receptors work to an audience without specialist knowledge, it might be useful to describe them as ‘mini sorting machines,’ that ‘ensure only the right deliveries are made to specific cells.’

Whenever you use a description or comparison in your writing, try to make sure that it is succinct, simple to understand/visualize, appropriate for your audience, and – most importantly of all – an accurate description of the more complex relationship you are trying to explain. For example, ‘winning that science scholarship’ is not ‘like winning the lottery,’ because there was no skill involved in the latter. Instead, it is more ‘like getting your dream job.’

Similes actively explain a comparison for a reader (e.g. ‘smaller rivers branch into bigger ones like blood vessels branching into major veins and arteries), whereas metaphors turn one object into another, thereby leaving the reader to make the connection (e.g. the typical student’s study area is a disaster zone). These subtle differences are more important than you might think: Similes, if chosen appropriately for the audience at which they are aimed, should always be understood, whereas metaphors can ‘open the door’ to personal interpretations.

Some examples

Notice the subtle difference in the following similes and metaphors:

1S) These elements react as fast as lightning.
1M) This reaction is a lightning bolt.


2S) Sitting through that lecture was like watching paint dry.
2M) That lecture was a snorefest.


3S) The two species are as different as night and day.
3M) The two species are black and white.

Note how the metaphors could be interpreted differently to how they are intended (especially 3M, which is supposed to imply the two species are very different from one another, but you could see how people might think the two species are coloured black and white instead).

Choosing When to Use Similes and Metaphors

It is very important to gauge your audience when using comparisons and descriptions; a simile or metaphor might be technically great, but if it means nothing to the people reading your article, it will only confuse and frustrate. For example, there is no point in telling the general public in Canada that: Students trudging to their 9:00 am lectures are “as sleepy as brown bats.” It is true that brown bats are among the sleepiest creatures in the animal kingdom, but it is highly unlikely that most people know this.

Things to Avoid

Firstly, the overuse of descriptions and comparisons typically makes things more confusing and (almost certainly) less concise, so try not to use too many in your writing.

Secondly, ‘dead’ descriptions and comparisons are of little use because they have become so common in our language (and thus, they have lost their impact), and because their original meaning has been lost. For example, telling the audience that the alpha male gorilla in your study is ‘as bold as brass,’ could be problematic. Scholars believe that the simile comes from the 18th century, and that it was used then to describe people that had been executed publically after being found guilty of serious crimes; brass was deemed to be a cheap, vulgar metal, so the simile was used to suggest the executions had happened cheaply, and violently. This is almost certainly not what you want to say about your confident gorilla looking after his tribe in the beautiful misty mountains.

Thirdly, comparisons can be inappropriate for a whole variety of reasons. For example, they might be offensive in some way (maybe they are too graphic, rude and/or unsuitable for certain sexes/races in specific contexts). An example of this would be the following, which appeared in a research blog post a few years ago: ‘Mr. X may still be recovering from stomach surgery, but he hasn’t lost his appetite for research.’

Finally, mixed comparisons should be avoided at all costs. These include two or more unlinked descriptors in the same sentence, which makes the meaning very difficult to interpret. A good example of this comes up in the accompanying video resource…

Video Resource

For a recap and for some extra information about using comparisons and descriptions effectively in your writing, please watch Grammar Squirrel’s video on the UBC Science Writing YouTube channel.

We then suggest you complete the quick quiz (below) to see whether you have mastered some of the important skills relating to using comparisons and descriptions.

Comparisons and Descriptions

  • 1) Does the following sentence contain a metaphor or a simile?
    Designing our Grammar Squirrel video resources was no walk in the park.
  • 2) Does the following sentence contain a metaphor or a simile?
    Having said that, it was a lot of fun, like working on a group project with enthusiastic colleagues.
  • 3) Does the following sentence contain a metaphor or a simile?
    However, in terms of whether the videos are useful for students, the proof will be in the eating.
  • 4) Does the following sentence contain a metaphor or a simile?
    And we won’t be served that dish until the students have provided lots of feedback.
  • Now read the following four comparisons (A, B, C and D below) and rank them in order from best to worst.

    A) Waiting around before an exam is like being on ‘Death Row’.
    B) Receiving a good grade after revising hard is like earning a deserved promotion.
    C) Being made to work in a group with unhelpful people is like being allocated the only broken seat in the movie theatre.
    D) Getting an unfair appraisal from your tutor is like being picked last as the uncoordinated kid in gym class.

    For Questions 5, 6, 7, and 8, simply input the number that indicates your ranking of this statement (1 = best, 2 = second best, 3 = second worst, 4 = worst). Note: Make sure you only choose each number/rank once.
  • 9) Complete the sentence by choosing the most suitable comparison from the options provided?

    Random genetic mutations are very common but the chance that any one unique mutation will lead to a very favourable result is the same as…
  • 10) Complete the sentence by choosing the most suitable comparison from the options provided?

    Some people believe that spending more money trying to conserve polar bears as the ice caps continue to melt is akin to…